My Essay Havaianas: Selling Flops Or Something More?

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I've decided to revise my second essay, “Havaianas: Selling Flip-Flops or Something More?”. I did receive an A on this paper; however, I also received an A on my first essay and figured that there were at least more micro-errors on my latter paper than on my first paper. So after I communicate the few micro-errors that were committed and how to fix them, I will delve into what I would like to see in my writing in a more general sense. I want to first fix the the pronoun disagreements that I had in my essay. For instance I wrote, “...Havaianas shows that they are just like the audience.” To fix this I referred to Rules For Writers where it reads, “ collective nouns such as jury, committee, audience, crowd, class, troop, family, team, and couple name a group. Ordinarily the group…show more content…
209) This would change the “they” in my previous sentence to an “it is”. I also committed the error of writing a sentence fragment in my paper which reads, “But rather says something about the roles of gender in our society.” To fix this I referred to Rules for Writers where it reads, “Often the easiest solution is to turn the fragment into a sentence.”(pg. 186) I can do this by inserting the subject, which would be the Havaianas advertisement, into the sentence. This particular revision has been pretty simple, since the errors that existed in my paper were relatively minor ones, and no real overhauling had to be done to fix them. However I would say that this revision has helped me establish a better grasp on pronoun agreement, and when to use a
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