I Am Here Analysis

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Hale 1 Jared Hale College Writing 1 Joshua Murray 13 October 2011 I Am Here There are countless different ways to write a story and numerous different ways to argue your point of view. You need to make a smart decision in which style you choose because in most cases the way you display your information will be more important that the topic itself. Mathew Honan of “I Am Here” excels in his style choice, but he also, I feel, makes some mistakes and could change some areas to make them better help his story. First of all, the story is written because of a new IPhone/Android application “Whoshere” and the author is trying to argue if updating your location status every few minutes is a good idea or an invasion of privacy. Honan begins…show more content…
These were the little statements such as “Sorry weirdos-I love you, but she has a point.” or, “Sadly, I couldn’t get anyone to connect with me-for some reason, nobody wanted me to track their every movement?” These are small humorous additions to the story that without them the story is still great but with them it keeps the reader wanting to read more and even though small, they are a large help to Honan’s story and he does a nice job of adding them in places they fit and not just throwing them in randomly throughout his writing. In conclusion, Mathew Honan does a lot of things right when righting this story, He makes a few mistakes like including too much of his personal life and telling the world that his wife will be home alone for a week, but what he does right including making himself relevant in the beginning of the story, using his personal experiences Hale 4 effectively and making the reader want to read more, and I definitely believe that the things Honan does right in the story without a doubt trump the things he did not do right. No one can write a perfect story, there will always be small changes that could take place, but Mathew Honan did a wonderful job with his essay “I Am Here”. It was not only informational; it told a story and was even funny and quirky at times. He certainly wrote a story that kept the reader reading and I would say that is what is most

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