Peer Review for "If We Must Die" by Claude Mckay

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ENG 240: Peer Review 1) The writer chose to analyze “If We Must Die” by Claude McKay; the specific argument that the writer is making is: During Slavery, the Civil War and the Reconstruction Era, African Americans gave us songs, poems and many other things that show us what they went through. These poems and songs as well as the poem, “If We Must Die” represented images that can be linked back to the oral tradition; no this argument is not unique, because we have learned in class that songs and poems created during these times shows us what they were enduring during hard times and his thesis is kind of general; The essay partially fulfills what the writer promised to talk about because the writer to the poem line by line and analyzed the poem by telling the reader what he thought each line meant but he didn’t specifically state what his main topics/arguments would be. Since his thesis is kind of general, the writer should possibly go through his essay and look for specific examples that he talked about and add some more to his thesis to make it more specific. 2) His fourth paragraph had the best evidence and analysis but it needs to be cut because it’s too big, I think the reader should focus more on the images from specific parts of the poem and talk more on the significance of the specific parts rather than analyzing the poem line by line; His first paragraph should be explained more and have examples from the text; his second paragraph could somehow be intertwined with his first paragraph since this poem paper isn’t really about the author it’s more about analyzing the essay. 3) The writer partially supports his thesis with evidence. I say this because his essay and thesis aren’t organized well. The only evidence represented for his thesis is his fourth paragraph, in which he analyzed the whole poem line by line. Doing this, make his essay seem poorly
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