State Prison System Analysis

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The federal system is a lot [Only commercial shipments and real estate are measured in lots. To use "a lot of" to mean "many," "much," or "a large amount" is a colloquialism (not universally clear). Use another term.] less in inmate population then the state prison system. The federal prison system was created [Passive voice] by congress [Capitalize if referring to the Congress of the United States] and was established [Passive voice] under President Herbert Hoover. Congress passed the three prison act in the year 1891 the three acts were used in all federal prisons throughout the nation. The mission of the Federal Bureau of Prisons is to protect society by confining offenders in the controlled environments of prisons and community based [As an adjective, these two words should be hyphenated] facilities that are [Clearer writing suggestion--see if the sentence can be rewritten to remove "that are" or "who are"] safe, humane, cost-efficient, appropriately secure, and provide work and other self improvement opportunities to assist offenders in becoming law-abiding citizens. The Federal Bureau of Prisons protects society by confining offenders in the controlled environments of prisons and community-based facilities that are [Clearer writing suggestion--see if the sentence can be rewritten to remove "that are" or "who are"] safe, humane, cost-efficient, and…show more content…
It has too many meanings: huge, superior, numerous, etc. Besides "much," a "great deal" can mean an excellent transaction. Use a more specific adjective] to keep the inmates away from the community. The federal system is more of a system that seems more private and less crazy then the state system. The state system is more for the hard criminals that will not change and in some eye’s [Apostrophe: remove if the word is not possessive] belong there. The state and federal in some areas need help to keep budget up for them to have the security they need to keep these inmates form escaping. One solution I would like [The subjunctive is correctly used to express an habitual or conditional action but not to hedge. State it plainly--"I want"] to input would be to combine the systems to make a larger system to house all inmates under the levels; this could make room in the prisons and help with budget
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