Commentary on Narrative Story

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Commentary on Narrative story I commenced my story with a Interrogative leading into a dialogue accompanying another character who was briefly in the story “So you are telling me that…?” this was my way of introducing a character that was going to be referred to later. Dialect was also used. Words such as “oo” was in cooperated to show the reader the setting of the story, which took place in Lagos Nigeria. I wanted to have the reader kept in suspense therefore I would often leave a paragraph/ a scene on a cliff hanger, as I did not want to give the whole of the story away. Labov’s theory influenced the way I structured my story, there was a beginning, middle and end to my story. However if I had the chance to rewrite it again, I would have in cooperated ‘Medias res’ into my story, this is where you start writing your story from the middle. To differentiate the age difference between the mum and Children, I had to use descriptive words to explain their actions “as she snapped her deceivingly supple hands”. I wanted to create a humorous section in the story, I did this in the second paragraph to set a contrast with the serious tone that I created in the first paragraph; the usage of Paralinguistic features helped me to create this alongside emotive language. Back channel was used when dialogues were made between the two teenagers; I did this to create a characters voice in the readers head and to make the story more realistic, alongside the usage of Interruptions “But mum..” “Just go Ria..” . I wanted my story genre to be based on adventure; I was influenced by Maya Angelou’s ‘Mom & Me & Mom” however I also based my story on Comedy. Seeing as it was an oral narrative I wrote my story in third person, I wanted to create the effect of a narrator telling the story in the readers head. I found it difficult in the beginning as the story was based on an Anecdote
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