Thesis Statement For Smarthinking's E-Structor

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Smarthinking's E-structor Response Form (Your marked-up essay is below this form.) HOW THIS WORKS: Your e-structor has written overview comments about your essay in the form below. Your e-structor has also embedded comments [in bold and in brackets] throughout your essay. Thank you for choosing Smarthinking's OWL; best wishes with revising your paper! Hi there, Nyeesha, and welcome to Smarthinking. My name is Michelle C, and I have read your paper about becoming a probation officer. I have made some points below about developing a clear thesis statement, combining complete statements in a sentence with the correct conjunction and/or punctuation, and choosing precise and specific words to convey your meaning. You might want to think about those issues as you revise your work. Do also look for some embedded comments in the essay's body and remember to apply the advice in the ERF and embedded in your essay throughout this paper and any other papers that you write. *Strengths of the essay: Nyeesha, I was tickled by his statement: “This…show more content…
This occupation is not attractive to some potential entrants due to relatively low earnings, heavy workloads, and high stress. For these reasons, job opportunities are expected to be excellent. Personal characteristics for a probation officer to be successful they must have good communication skills, problem solving skills, and good report writing skills. They also must be mature, confident and able to remain positive in difficult situations, honest, [missing conjunction] able to follow procedures. Becoming a probation officer may be hard work but hard work pays off. Things like this take time but with training and lots of studying it will eventually get easier by the day. I chose this because I like a challenge and this is a good

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