Smart Thinking Essay

1283 Words6 Pages
Smarthinking's E-structor Response Form (Your marked-up essay is below this form.) HOW THIS WORKS: Your e-structor has written overview comments about your essay in the form below. Your e-structor has also embedded comments [in bold and in brackets] throughout your essay. Thank you for choosing Smarthinking's OWL; best wishes with revising your paper! Good day, Jacquella! My name is Ana F. and I’ll be your e-structor for this submission. Let me offer you some useful writing tips to help you improve your essay. Let’s begin! *Strengths of the essay: You did a good job in differentiating listening from hearing, Jacquella: “Listening and hearing are two different processes.” Through this, your readers can have a better insight about listening, leading them into a proper perspective about your topic. Nice job! *Jacquella 5760531 has requested that you respond to the Content Development: Now, let’s pay closer attention to your quotations and make sure you use them critically in your paper. I asked you this because some quotes in your essay seems to stand independently from your discussion, Jacquella. Keep in mind that we only use quotations to support our points and not to stand for our ideas. Therefore, it is important that we introduce them properly with our personal insights. Compare the following examples: “Awareness is the first step towards emancipation” (Fairclough, 1989). This is in contrast with critical linguists such as Norman Fairclough, as he states in his book that “awareness is the first step towards emancipation” (1989). As you can observe, we can hear the voice of the writer in the second sentence as compared to the first. This is how you can strengthen your discussion, Jacquella. By focusing more on your personal insights, your readers can easily see the relevance of the quotations you used for your essay. Having that in mind, how will you

More about Smart Thinking Essay

Open Document