Persuasive Communication Essay

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Persuasive Communication Name: Kelly B. Veitch For Dr. Larry Byrd MGT505 Date: February 17, 2013 Persuasive Communication Email Problems After reviewing the Bobby Johnson email (Page 111 in the text book), several communication problems were discovered. They are discussed in the succeeding paragraphs. The first communication problem is that the sender of the email appears to be sending the email to himself, and it is not clear who the email is actually directed to. The second communication problem is that the email lacks a date for the retirement party. The third communication problem is that the email lacks a physical address for the location of the party. Although the name of the venue is provided the address should be included for those unfamiliar with the locale. The fourth communication problem is that the email lacks the desired amount of money needed to contribute for the gift certificate. The fifth communication problem is that there is no R.S.V.P. information provided or if it is needed in order to attend. Email Rewritten In order to improve the email, it is rewritten below considering the 10 Cs for writing effectively. FROM: Bobby Johnson, Executive Vice President TO: All Company Employees SUBJECT: Joe Banyon’s Retirement Party Hello everyone! As most of you know Joe Banyon is retiring next month, and I have been asked to arrange a farewell party in his honor. The party will be held on Friday, February 28, 2013, from 6:00 pm – 8:00 pm at The City Café, 1234 East Main St., Columbia, SC 29201. Also, as a surprise (keep this information on the down lo!), we would like to give Joe a gift certificate for his upcoming travel adventures, and are asking that everyone contribute a minimum of ten dollars (cash only). Please respond by emailing me at bjohnson21@aol.com or calling (555) 555-5555 no

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