Flow Chart for Revising YourEssay #3
Revision strategy follows each question.
Introduction and Thesis:
Does your introduction immediately invite your reader to engage with the novel or story and critical essay with you? Explain.
If no, then: Cut any tangential information that doesn’t get right to the subject and framing question for the short story "Omelas" or provide a good introduction to the graphic novel, Persepolis. For example, after reading your introduction, your reader should have a good idea about the kind of novel Persepolis is and what particular aspect you are going to focus your analysis on. Similarly, if you are writing about "The Ones Who Walk Away from Omelas," your intro should frame the essay and offer a context based on your understanding of the story. Your intro may also include a specific question and your answer to that question.
Have you placed your thesis appropriately? Where is it?
If no, then: For most freshman essays, the best place for your thesis or controlling idea is the last sentence of your first paragraph. You may decide that you want to ask the question here and lead your reader to your thesis. It's up to you, but you need to have a recognizable "conclusion" or thesis.
Does your introduction provide a "roadmap" or preview of the organization of your essay? It SHOULD! Describe and outline this "roadmap" here in your response.
If no, then: The best time to revise your intro is when you’re done writing the essay. Will your reader know where you’re headed by what you write in your first paragraph? If not, what can you write that will guide them? Work on making sure your introduction effectively leads your reader into the essay.
Does your thesis reveal your narrowed topic—the real what and why of your essay? Explain what your thesis is and how you've narrowed it for the essay.